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Nightmare Gotcha

Created by Avis, Barb C, Emma, Leslie, Linda A, Lois, Luann, Marcia, and Sandy

 

1. Vocab: petrified; areas: words in a series, apostrophe, indentation, usage

A is always the incorrect sentence; B is correct.

A) one morning i woke up with a terribly frightened petrified feeling and i new a nightmares horror had come upon me

B) One morning, I woke up with a terribly frightened, petrified feeling, and I knew a nightmare's horror had come upon me.

 

2. vocabulary: recollection; areas: capitalizing I, Comma separating prepositional phrase

 

A) as i searched my brain it produced a recollection of the nightmare

B) As I searched my brain, it produced a recollection of the nightmare.

 

3. vocabulary: assault, hare; areas: capitalizing, punctuation at end of sentence

A) i was being assaulted by gigantic, grey hares who were surrounding my home

B) I was being assaulted by gigantic gray hares who were surrounding my home.

 

4. vocabulary: portal; capitalizing, proper punctuation, spelling

 

A) they entered thorough every portal they culd as if nothing wood stop them

B) They entered through every portal they could, as if nothing would stop them!

 

5. vocabulary: concoction; capitalizing i, compound sentence punctuation, changing an adjective to an adverb

A) i grabbed my trusty concoction of "Hare Spray" which i kept on hand for such emergencies and i sprayed continuous for what seemed forever

B) I grabbed my trusty concoction of "Hare Spray" which I kept on hand for such emergencies, and I sprayed continuously for what seemed forever.

 

6.vocabulary: automatically; punctuation: exclamation mark; spelling: thunderous

A. Suddenly I heard a thunderus noise which made me automatically drop the can of "Hair Spray"

B. Suddenly I heard a thunderous noise which made me automatically drop the can of "Hair Spray"!

 

7. Vocabulary: utter, vapors, sinister; Punctuation: comma after a prepositional phrase, exclamation mark; Spelling: realized

A. To my utter horror I realised that the vapors from the hair spray had signalled to something sinister

B. To my utter horror, I realized that the vapors from the hair spray had signaled to something sinister!

 

8. Vocabulary: shrill; Spelling: screamed, voice; Punctuation: quotation marks, exclamation marks, Capitalization pronoun I, beginning of quotation

A. i screemed in a shrill voice, "oh no! Giant bees!"

B. I screamed in a shrill voice, "Oh no! Giant bees!"

 

9. Capitalize beginning sentence, indentation, quotation marks around speakers words, use of question mark, not exclamation as in a statement. Spelling of ordeel (ordeal) use of comma to make clarification between one idea and another.

 

A . "oh No Giant BEES! What was I to do! It wasn't just an everyday ordeel to be attacked by Giant BEES. Knowing that I had to think fast on my feet I was wanting to very careful.

B. "Oh No! Giant Bees! What was I to do? It wasn't just an everyday ordeal to be attacked by Giant Bees. Knowing that I had to think fast on my feet. I was wanting to be very careful.

 

10. Focus on spelling of hummingbird, cautiously, possibly, distract. Also use of comma to separate ideas)

A. Looking around the room the first thing that came to mind was my humingbird solution. If I could just cautously and carefully get to it I would be able to possible destract them.

B. Looking around the room, the first thing that came to mind was my hummingbird solution. If I could just cautiously and carefully get to it, I would be able to possibly detract them.

 

11. opposite, shrieked, posibly, sudden, occurred, to, perhaps-spelling errors, punctuation, capitalization, idea clarification)

 

A. carefully I tiptoed to the oppasite side of the room sweating the whole way,and thinking outloud. oh no, I shreeked what if they are killer-honey-sweat bees! That would mean they'd eat me first, visit the kitchen and then come back to me for my sweat. HMMMMMMMM. I just could not posibly think of what I was going to do..... when all of a suden, it ocured too me that purhaps..................

B. Carefully I tiptoed to the opposite side of the room, sweating the whole way, and thinking out loud.

"Oh no", I shrieked, "what if they are killer-honey-sweat bees! That would mean they'd eat me first, visit the kitchen, and then come back to me for my sweat."

HMMMMMMMM. I just could not possibly think of what I was going to do..... when all of a sudden, it occurred to me that perhaps..................

 

12. Capitalize beginning sentence. Use of exclamation mark. Commas in a series. Vocabulary word flailed

A. bees the size of bats bees that flailed and crashed into walls furniture and me

B. Bees the size of bats! Bees that flailed and crashed into walls, furniture, and me!

 

13. Vocabulary word: rooted; comma after adverb vainly, period at end of sentences

A. vainly i tried to run my feet were rooted to the floor

B. Vainly, I tried to run. My feet were rooted to the floor.

 

14. vocabulary word: din; period at end of sentence; Spelling errors scream, throat, pierce

A. the screem in my throut refused to pearce the din of the beastly bees

B. The scream in my throat refused to pierce the din of the beastly bees.

 

15. Vocabulary words: anguished, annihilation; quotation; capitalize first word in sentence; end sentence with period.

 

A. not yet i anguished as thoughts of annihilation reduced me to a near state of unconsciousness

B. "Not yet," I anguished, as thoughts of annihilation reduced me to a near state of unconsciousness.

16. capitalize first word in sentence, comma after first clause, periods at end of two sentences; vocabulary words: peril, whir; plural possessive noun

 

A. at risk of utter peril, i stoped and listened a pattern of sound came from the whir of the beasts wings

B. At risk of utter peril, I stopped and listened. A pattern of sound came from the whir of the beasts' wings.

 

17. comma after adverb; capitalize I; period at end of sentence

 

A. suddenly i regained my awareness the pattern i heard was a code.....

B. Suddenly, I regained my awareness. The pattern I heard was a code.

 

18. Capitalize beginning of sentence; Period at end; Spelling: signal

A. it seemed to be some kind of signle

B. It seemed to be some kind of signal.

 

19. Capitalize beginning of sentence and "I"; Comma after nervously and low. Period at end. Spelling growling

A. nervously i turned towards the door as i heard low grouling sounds

B. Nervously, I turned towards the door as I heard low, growling sounds.

 

20. Capitalize beginning of sentence and "King Benny". Comma after cat and King Benny. Period at end. Spelling through Vocabulary monarch

A. in thru the door burst the giant cat king benny monarch of all creatures

B. In through the door burst the giant cat, King Benny, monarch of all creatures.

 

21. Capital to begin sentence; Commas refers back to Benny; Period end sentence; Capital to begin sentence; Comma introductory word; Capital proper names; Period end sentence; Vocabulary abode

A. benny my infamous beloved cat was no ordinary cat after all he was king benny ruler of my charming and humble abode

B. Benny, my infamous beloved cat, was no ordinary cat. After all, he was King Benny, ruler of my charming and humble abode.

 

21. Capital to begin sentence; Commas for a series and prepositional phrase; Spelling 2; Period end of the sentence; Vocabulary

A. as I saw him perch growl and then pounce toward the queen of the giant bees a frighteful and pierceing scream emerged from within me

B. As I saw him perch, growl, and then pounce toward the queen of the giant bees, a frightful and piercing scream emerged from within me.

 

22. beginning capitalization, comma after prepositional phrase, comma after appositive.)

A. from the corner of my eye I spotted duke the wonder dog!

B. From the corner of my eye, I spotted Duke, the wonder dog!

 

23.capitalization at beginning of sentence, comma after King Benny as an appositive, spelling humble)

A. duke was going to attack King benny, ruler of my humbel kingdom, before he could get the Queen Bee!

B. Duke was going to attack King Benny, ruler of my humble kingdom, before he could get the Queen Bee!

 

24.Capitalize I or beginning of sentence, vocabulary "doomed", capitalize proper names (Duke and Benny)

A. i shrieked knowing that we were all doomed if duke reached benny before benny reached the queen!

B. I shrieked, knowing that we were all doomed if Duke reached Benny before Benny reached the queen!

 

25. [Run on sentence, comma between nemesis and duke (appositive), capitalize Duke the Wonder Dog ( proper names and titles) vocabulary nemesis

A. King Benny leaped onto the Queen Bee and he bit off her head and he spit it out and then he turned to face his nemesis duke the wonder dog.

B. King Benny leaped onto the Queen Bee, bit off her head, spit it out, then turned to face his nemesis, Duke the Wonder Dog.

 

26. spelling sight, digits vocabulary, clamped is incorrectly capitalized

A. I Clamped my hands over my eyes to hide the horrible site of the fight. Nothing happened, so I cautiously spread my digits and peaked out.

B. I clamped my hands over my eyes to hide the horrible sight of the fight. Nothing happened, so I cautiously spread my digits and peeked out.

 

 

27. tail instead of tale, its instead of it's, other instead of another

A. Kind Benny and Duke the Wonder dog were licking each other. Duke's tail was about to fly off his body because of the speed of it's wagging. They licked and slurped and slobbered on each another.

B. King Benny and Duke the Wonder Dog were licking each other. Duke's tail was about to fly off his body because of the speed of its wagging. They licked and slurped and slobbered on each other.

 

 

28. spelling getting, vocabulary spittle, to instead of to (homophones),compound words: nowhere

A. I was geting wet from the spittle spraying all around. The spittle seemed too hit me in the face and no where else. It hit hard and felt as if moist sandpaper was rubbing my face.

B. I was getting wet from the spittle spraying all around. The spittle seemed to hit me in the face and nowhere else. It hit hard and felt as if moist sandpaper was rubbing my face.

 

 

29. capitalization King Benny, spelling cheek

A. I woke up! Benny was king benny no more. He was sitting on my chest and licking me on the cheeck. It had all been a bad dream. I have got to quit eating animal crackers before bed.

B. I woke up! Benny was King Benny no more. He was sitting on my chest and licking me on the cheek. It had all been a bad dream. I have got to quit eating animal crackers before bed.

 

 

 

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